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3:23 pm
March 8, 2013
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A malicious entity enters my room
Fillin my heart imenint doom
It's A demon never leavin he looms
My heart is racin goin boom boom boom
He stares at me with his demonic grin
Laughing as he reads off my every sin
My chances of stayin sane is lookin grim
It's all because of him
Now I'm over here shakin like mj fox
He won't stop until I'm in my final box
I'm feelin uncomfortable like some vinal crocs
No the pain won't stop
The gut wrenchin feelin as I'm hearin the words comin outta this heathen he's not quittin or even breathin
I just wanna leave this fire being bleedin
I keep askin this devil why me
He stops talkin for a second then stares at me quietly
He opens his mouth and says its because there's no angels in heaven who cry for me
Imma lost soul and I packed the last of my innocence in my first bowl
All the sins in my life are startin to take its toll
I just wanted to be in nirvana like David grohl
But that's a farfetched goal
Before the demon disappears he makes one thing clear
I'm never will succeed ill stay the hunted deer
Then he disappears into my bedroom mirror
I sit here frozen like I had ALS
I'm tryin to move, I do my best
But I'm scared of the demon who would of guessed
Was it just a illusion from a mind ultra depressed
Or was it a test? The devils ACT
My feels like its filled with TNT
I bet the Demons still watchin me full of glee
-chuklz
For this one I could give a fuck less what you think. Everyone has their dark times. I express my pent up darkness through my rhymes. So yeah.
My brain is gone, my brain is gone, say no more my brain is gone
3:33 pm
April 15, 2013
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It's not a rap unless you spit it. This is mere rhyme writing. Poetry, if you want to be generous... perhaps more accurately defined as simple mother gooseries. Thanks for sharing.
3:36 pm
March 8, 2013
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Guest said
It's not a rap unless you spit it. This is mere rhyme writing. Poetry, if you want to be generous... perhaps more accurately defined as simple mother gooseries. Thanks for sharing.
no its a rap. dont tell me what my shit is and isnt.
My brain is gone, my brain is gone, say no more my brain is gone
3:55 pm
March 8, 2013
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Chuklz said
Guest said
It's not a rap unless you spit it. This is mere rhyme writing. Poetry, if you want to be generous... perhaps more accurately defined as simple mother gooseries. Thanks for sharing.no its a rap. dont tell me what my shit is and isnt.
a damn okay rap at that
My brain is gone, my brain is gone, say no more my brain is gone
4:01 pm
July 26, 2013
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Guest said
It's not a rap unless you spit it. This is mere rhyme writing. Poetry, if you want to be generous... perhaps more accurately defined as simple mother gooseries. Thanks for sharing.
What if he said verse? Would it be correct then or does that still has to be spoken?
4:03 pm
March 8, 2013
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Demented Smoka said
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It's not a rap unless you spit it. This is mere rhyme writing. Poetry, if you want to be generous... perhaps more accurately defined as simple mother gooseries. Thanks for sharing.What if he said verse? Would it be correct then or does that still has to be spoken?
He should know what I mean and not try to be too technical.
My brain is gone, my brain is gone, say no more my brain is gone
4:39 pm
February 9, 2013
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Did you learn how to rap on sesame street
2:07 pm
May 29, 2013
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Again, the end of every single bar doesnt have to be a ryhme. It's very simplistic and seems like you try to hard to rhyme. Not as cringe worthy as the last one Though. Do more rhymes like quietly-cry for me. Those are good. But room, doom, boom, etc. just come off lame.
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2:21 pm
February 9, 2013
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I like my dog
I like my pogs
fav icp song the smog
I can rap
Im on the map
Trees have sap
I gotta crap
Just ate time for a nap
Cus i was sleepy
Had a scary dreamy
I was suckerpunched by lil.sneezy
Then he took my style
Last night was wild
Made out wit kyle
Then we adopted child
I only rap bout demons
Being straight.makes.me start heavin
Im parched where da semen
So many responses im creamin
3:37 pm
March 8, 2013
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LTB said
Again, the end of every single bar doesnt have to be a ryhme. It's very simplistic and seems like you try to hard to rhyme. Not as cringe worthy as the last one Though. Do more rhymes like quietly-cry for me. Those are good. But room, doom, boom, etc. just come off lame.
yeah i was thinkin about rthe boom part and thought that part was kinda stale. But i pretty much love the rest. I couled give a fuck less about the haters. Also i like when shit rhymes alot.
JabroniKilla said
I like my dog
I like my pogs
fav icp song the smog
I can rap
Im on the map
Trees have sap
I gotta crap
Just ate time for a nap
Cus i was sleepy
Had a scary dreamy
I was suckerpunched by lil.sneezy
Then he took my style
Last night was wild
Made out wit kyle
Then we adopted child
I only rap bout demons
Being straight.makes.me start heavin
Im parched where da semen
So many responses im creamin
Best shit i ever read. jabroni is mt biggest fan!
My brain is gone, my brain is gone, say no more my brain is gone
6:09 pm
March 31, 2012
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i cant stand when people rhyme in raps! i want that super intricate shit that hardly if ever rhymes!! haha
6:29 pm
February 9, 2013
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Like esham say its not all bout ryhming but also cant spell it
6:33 pm
April 15, 2013
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Kool Keith maintains a good balance of rhyming and non-rhyming bars, in my opinion.
I can't stand when people only go for rhyming the end of the word, or always just basic single syllables. That style is caveman. I remember when I first heard MCs rhyming the vowel sounds, as opposed to the technical rhymes for the word. I realized that was usually enough, given the delivery was tight. That's when shit gets cracked open lyrically, for me at least. This stuff here, this is just crap.
6:47 pm
March 31, 2012
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Guest said
Kool Keith maintains a good balance of rhyming and non-rhyming bars, in my opinion.I can't stand when people only go for rhyming the end of the word, or always just basic single syllables. That style is caveman. I remember when I first heard MCs rhyming the vowel sounds, as opposed to the technical rhymes for the word. I realized that was usually enough, given the delivery was tight. That's when shit gets cracked open lyrically, for me at least. This stuff here, this is just crap.
although 99% of my shit is multi-syllabics i really dont care if others use it or not.. im just annoyed when people try to claim cats who rhyme single syllables are lyricist.. complexity & simplicity have their places & can co-exist..
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