are you influence by Early Violent J years?  it could have been better if you didn't take a short pause after each or everyother word, and just flow. I guess the beat was too slow for you to do that though... I guess I can say its better.

now, I have a question for you Jiffy Pop.  is this how you really are? or are you portraying a character in your raps?

scruffy said

JiffyLong said  
Scruffy said    

 as my blind ninja master used to say, 'the keenest eye, is that which looks inward.'  

  

mmmm that's delicious. I don't know where you got that from, but im gonna keep that in my back pocket.

but yes Jiffy Lube, us that advice above.

JiffyLong said
@sean-law 

its somewhat how I am, some of it is from the perspective of other people I know around here, a lot of it is me, but not all. So it's kinda morphed. Like, I have encountered someone on Facebook like the person I talked about in the first verse, I was guessing she was fake as fuck. Second verse, it's somewhat me, some other people. Third, it's what I like to do, but at the end, that's when I say everybody has a complete different view so it can't be perfect. Brings out the name of the track, Reality. Scruffy said my last track had no point, I tried to make one on here. 

ill drop my 2 cents in there aswell i suppose. its better then your first attempt but you still have a long way togo. keep at it man, i thought it was alright considering your doing it all off an ipad. reminds me of some old school rap. your only what 15 years old? if this is what you want to do, keep at it man. just keep grinding, you dont get good overnight, it takes a long time and alot of hard work to get good.

two thumbs up for effort though. 

twiztidkillaxxx2 said
Sell crack cocaine to build your rep.

And respect

JiffyLong said
@twiztidkillaxxx2 

Would he give me any cheeseburgers too?

Canadian burgers