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Dream & Ride (Poem)
December 5, 2014
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Tomorrow’s already written for those who don’t seek,

And next week is just another week that was last week,

Time flies as you ignore the lies and fight the doubt that defies

the hardened courage inside that took you a whole childhood to dream up and ride,

 

It’s always still there

Even after you’ve lost

And told yourself you no longer care

It’s always still there

Once you’ve built that courage again

Dream and ride back into that great somewhere.

"I Just Wanna Hide Inside My Own Private Hell"- Boondox

December 6, 2014
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I like that, that was good. 

"Your girl fucked me 'cause you cummin' quicker than FedEx Air"- Sean Law

February 21, 2016
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i enjoyed the 1st part, the second half seemed to be like a different poem just added to the 1st

anyways overall this was pretty good, i enjoyed the multi attempts, the repeditive rhyme scheme worked tho

it made the 1st half fun… and the hook part or w.e its called in poetry, it was ok but maybe could have used that scheme again

February 21, 2016
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Reʞluse said
i enjoyed the 1st part, the second half seemed to be like a different poem just added to the 1st

anyways overall this was pretty good, i enjoyed the multi attempts, the repeditive rhyme scheme worked tho

it made the 1st half fun… and the hook part or w.e its called in poetry, it was ok but maybe could have used that scheme again

I appreciate the constructive criticism. Thank you. I get care free when writing poems, had it been something I was going to publish, I probably would of touched it up a bit, made it flow better. But this was just one of those spur of the moment things.

"I Just Wanna Hide Inside My Own Private Hell"- Boondox

February 21, 2016
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oh so this was a keystyle? .. nice , well in that case its a bit better than what i previously stated 

i give credit where its due.. and keystyle/freestyle is the most credited i believe

its props on write’n something good, but hella props for some’n up with something good off the top like that

hey checkout my keystyle, which is aptly named “Keystyle”, and maybe we can collab on something in the future 

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