Mr cock phonius antique equestrian, ya need a beat man. Right now its just rhyming words on a page. If wording is your believed to be strong point then start playing around with sounds. Rhyming words is poetry, putting that to a beat, is music. Scruffy was right.

I feel knowing/doing both will help with the other. 

Im a machinist, i can draw parts and make them. Knowing how their made makes the drawing easier and vice versa. I dont wanna draw a part thats above my level of actually producing.

You dont wanna make a beat you cant keep up with. Or rap faster than the beat your making… Thinking this takes a little more thought process than “im gonna be a rapper today”

And not for nothing its easier to prove a finished product than all the prints and steps to get there. 

Over all the words are decent, but I need a beat to feel them and ill get it fully. For me even if one portion lacks slightly, the other can pick it back up. 

Balls to the wall with my Johnson in a power socket
Breathin really heavy like I’m watchin Helga with a locket
Crackhead thoughts fill my mind and I can’t stop it
Talk what I talk but I’m drunk so I can’t walk it
Ain’t no balled up socks or a banana in my pocket
You should always shave your cooch unless you datin Davy Crockett
I got herpes on my face but I really can’t knock it
And this ain’t a clown nose; it’s a great dane’s red rocket

BARS